Do you think my writings ok?soz if its a bit long but its 4 school and i dont want 2 mess it up.?

I really do like this short story, but it doesnt sound like it was written by a kid for a homework assignment. It really sounded late 19th century. I think the story is very unique, and that you did a fairly good job on the story. But I would like more details on Gurty's dream, and Gurty's past dreams. That would make the story, to me.